Banal pedagogues veil factional repose.
You fill curious language systems with
trenchant arid space.
I use taut thought to
secrete opaque platitudes.
Your valid influence means
women represent droll admonitions of
observation delving into understanding.
Individual scholars form expatriate
pariah societies as
cunning character solutions ebb.
— Mh, Nov. 2010, using magpo.com’s words
Nice line: “I use taut thought to secrete opaque platitudes.”
Thanks! I still like that “taut”/”thought” rhyme — it’s obvious, yes, but somehow seeing those sounds next to each other felt novel.
Taut/Thought is a nice rhyme but it also works very well metrically because of the adjacency of two strong accents creates a nice syncopation — the iambic uses the “I” as an upbeat to the eighth note of “use” followed by two quarter notes — normally speech pattern pretty much forces this — or else the “I use” is a pair of eighth notes with taught starting the first beat — but then this comes out as ‘taught thought” as two dotted quarter notes — so either way nice rhythm and later platitudes is like a triplet.